go through the constructive criticism from your accountability partner 

make the changes that feel right 

Eradicate THESE words FROM YOUR WRITTEN AND SPOKEN VOCABULARY FOREVERMORE: Professional, innovative, sustainability, disrupt, pivot, passion, need, reliable, trustworthy, really, very, so, extra, mega

edit your run on sentences 

add in contractions LIKE I’m, you’re, that’s, what’s, where’s, when’s, how’s, isn’t, aren’t, wasn’t, weren’t, haven’t, hasn’t, hadn’t, won’t, wouldn’t, don’t, doesn’t, didn’t, can’t, couldn’t, shouldn’t, would’ve, should’ve, couldnT’ve, might’ve, must’ve…. 

check that the vibe of how you make people feel is still in your cover letter 

Save it and title i: dream client avatar cover letter seCOND draft 

MAke sure you save it as a word document or pages document 

do not save it as a pdf, jpeg, or png 

send your second draft to me at support@jonathantilley.com 

in the subject write: Cover Letter Critique